Sunday 10 April 2016

Writing

WALT develop a character 

I’m going to miss the plane I clicked my seatbelt I made WOOSH I was off. I looked outside it was a stormy day with strong winds about 60 mph I heard a loud noise we were going down. BANG! We hit the sparkling blue water. I doggie paddled to the top I floated for a long time “ouch,” I hit a rock “oh I forgot my name is Mr Mouse.” I walked around for a couple of hours,”my feet are burning whispered Mr Mouse I finally found a village on the golden sand it turns out I was in YouTube land. I found a hotel. I couldn't sleep that night I don't know why but I had a bad feeling. BANG somebody shot the door open.

My next step is to use better punctuation 

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